★★★★★ 3
Beta readers, please
Format: Kindle
I haven’t written a review in a while but this one motivated me to because it had potential and with some honest beta readers correcting its nonsense, it could have been pretty good. The writing is awkward at times and the world building was slow and one dimensional until around half way through and then it got much better. The main issues are with the characters, dialogue and plot. The FMC swings from stupidly trusting her “ friends” even when she is repeatedly betrayed to hating those who betrayed her to seemingly forgetting she hated them. It’s a whirlwind that reeks of adolescent drama and doesn’t fit the plot the author was trying, I think, to execute. The ridiculous decisions the character makes are so obviously made to move the plot in the direction the author was trying to go and was so basic in plot writing it was at times like reading a teenager’s writing project. It was hard to connect to the main character and hard to like any of the others. The author has potential but it was not met in this book. I will not be reading the next and really had to push through to even finish this one.
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Reviewed in the United States on December 4, 2023
